Marior, our director, sent Nearmiss more notes on “Time and Space”. He’s neither willing to drive the three hours to the roof we have access nor is he looking for a roof locally. He’s somewhat desperate to have us reset the critical scenes in a park.
Nearmiss took first crack at a rewrite and did a good job. We have different strengths, she and I. I’ll rewrite her dialogue, but she’s a great foil off of which to bounce new ideas. She came up with a workable compromise. It’s not as good as the original, but her ideas led to some of my own and we’ve groped toward a new finale that I can live with.
Looks like we lose the grotesques, however. In the original draft, they lined the rooftop. The old woman in our screenplay, Gretchen, had a nice moment with one, but it looks like we’ll have to drop that. You don’t find too many public parkland. Although – and I’m thinking out loud here – perhaps we can replace it with a spooky tree stump or something….
Working on shorts that will get made is gratifying, but progress on “By the Book” has ground to a halt since mid-January. Part of the problem is JOUR 428 – being a course I’ve never taught before, it takes a lot of time to put together. This was my last busy week for that, however, and it’s a downhill coast from here. I’m doing some Web redesign for Alex, but besides that, I should have more time to work on my own material. I’ll keep you posted.