Comments on: Two pages http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages.html All we are, basically, are monkeys with car keys. Mon, 06 Feb 2012 04:13:45 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Elvi http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages.html/comment-page-1#comment-879 Elvi Wed, 01 Mar 2006 00:15:39 +0000 http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages/#comment-879 I like the first one better. Not to jump on the bandwagon, or anything - I decided before reading comments, no, really. I like the first one better. Not to jump on the bandwagon, or anything – I decided before reading comments, no, really.

]]> By: Jutratest http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages.html/comment-page-1#comment-880 Jutratest Tue, 28 Feb 2006 14:55:59 +0000 http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages/#comment-880 Second one is a more enjoyable, and precice read. Second one is a more enjoyable, and precice read.

]]> By: Naila J. http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages.html/comment-page-1#comment-881 Naila J. Mon, 27 Feb 2006 21:40:49 +0000 http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages/#comment-881 I prefer the first one and also think that that's the rewrite because it is more precise, to the point, and yet, has more color in it. You don't need to know he has arthritis. It's obvious by his smile as he stretches.<br /><br />I also love Havah's emotional response, it makes it feel more real, more motherly.<br /><br />I love it.<br /><br />Can I be in one of your movies? ;) I prefer the first one and also think that that’s the rewrite because it is more precise, to the point, and yet, has more color in it. You don’t need to know he has arthritis. It’s obvious by his smile as he stretches.

I also love Havah’s emotional response, it makes it feel more real, more motherly.

I love it.

Can I be in one of your movies? ;)

]]> By: Scott the Reader http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages.html/comment-page-1#comment-882 Scott the Reader Mon, 27 Feb 2006 19:34:45 +0000 http://101squadron.com/blog/2006/02/two-pages/#comment-882 I think the first one is the rewrite. I think the first one is the rewrite.

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